topic and paper

Keeping these definitions in mind, describe an image from one of the CDC website pages on ADHD (

http://www.cdc.gov/NCBDDD/adhd/index.html

) that you find to be especially powerful and persuasive. What makes it so? Identify the image’s purpose and audience. Please be sure to provide a description of your chosen image so that your classmates and instructor can also analyze your selection.

3. Use the following checklist to help make final revisions on your essay:

Are the introduction, body, and conclusion clearly defined?

• Does the introduction provide sufficient background for the reader?
• Is there a thesis statement that makes the main ideas of the essay clear?
• Does every paragraph address the subject matter of the thesis in some way?
• Does the essay show that the writer has a knowledge of the audience?
• Is there credible support, specific examples, detail to make your points clearly?
• Is the tone and voice formal enough for an academic essay?
• Have all requirements of the assignment been met?
• Are all sources credible?
• Have all quoted, paraphrased, and summarized material been cited in-text with a corresponding reference on the reference page?
• Is the grammar and punctuation correct?
• Has the writer spell checked the essay?
• Is the title capitalized correctly?
• Are the correct margin and font and other requirements of GCU style correct?

 What aspects of your essay need improvement?

sunday: Revise the draft you have written, utilizing the feedback from your peer review. Complete your revision in conjunction with the guideline

ENG-105 Peer Review Worksheet: Rhetorical Analysis of a Public Document

Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.

Name of the draft’s author:
     

Name of the peer reviewer:
     

Reviewer

After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.

I believe that this essay meets the requirments of his assignment. One of the reasons why is because the author broke down the rhetorical analysis on the disorder called ADHD. The writer of the essay broke the article down stating that it involves specialist such as child psychologist or development pediatrician. Also the writer stated what CDC was and the purpose of the article.

After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.

Rhetorical Analysis Content and Ideas

· How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make about the public document he or she is analyzing?

The thesis statement of this essay is I can not find it.

· How successful is the writer’s summary of the public document under study?

The summary of the public document is that CDC wanted to bring awareness to the public regarding the ADHD. It also wanted to let the readers know that ADHD can be managed.

· How effective is the writer’s explanation and evaluation of the rhetorical situation, genre, and stance?

I see that it is effective and evauated as the rhetorical elements such as the breakdown of the logos, pathos, and ethos.

· How persuasively is evidence used to support assertions and enrich the essay?

There is evidence given in the essay such as the meanings, types, who involved, the causes, how it starts and the age group, and the overall review of the CDC article.

· How effectively does the essay’s content support the thesis by analyzing the document and evaluating its effectiveness according to strategies from chapter 8 of Writing with Purpose?

I really can not point out the thesis statement.

Organization

· How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper?

The introduction really captured my attention. It is hook was right on point. It made me want to keep reading it.

· Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below.

I am so sorry that I do not know or see the theisis statement in this essay.

· How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas?

The topic sentence was great to start off with. The topic sentence included what is ADHD, the proper diagnoses, and who all was involve in finding out out.

· How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay?

The ending of this essay was a strong finish. The conclusion, states that the CDC article on ADHD is that the purpose is to bring awareness to the public concerning the disorder.

Format

· How closely does the paper follow GCU formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1″ margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical GCU format?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· Are all sources listed on the references page in GCU format?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· Is the required minimum number of sources listed?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

Language Use and Style

· Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone.

|_|Yes |_|No The writer said the author made assumptions that his audience are not well conversant with ADHD.

· How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

· How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

Grammar and Mechanics

· Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.

|_|Yes |_|No Moreover word has 2 squiggly lines underneath.

· Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.

|_|Yes |_|No Add optional clarification here

Three things that I liked about your draft are:

1. The first thing I liked about the draft is that it was a strong essay to begin with.

2. The second thing is that, I like the breakdown of the purpose of how the essay was set up. The inplement of the meanings and the who’s invoved.

3. The third thing I like about the essay is that the elements was broken down such as the ethos, pathos and logos.

Three things that could be improved are:

1. First improvement is make sure the thesis stand out so it can be recognized.

2. The second improvement is that a hook is always needed, although the essay is great.

3. The last improvement is make sure the conclusion states the conclusion and have a stance that stands out.