Finalizing Rough Draft
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- Review the rough draft you submitted in Week 3, the Self-Assessment Worksheet and revision notes you completed in Week 4, and any feedback from your instructor. Use these documents to guide the edits you make as you finalize your paper.
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ANIMAL KINDNESS
ANIMAL KINDNESS
Animal Kindness
Delilah Horst
ENG 200/ Rhetoric and Research
February 14, 2021
Jennifer Kubach
Animal Kindness
In the environment we live in, several other organisms depend on their rights: human beings, wild animals and vegetation. There is a relationship between these organisms. However, there is an abnormal relationship between human beings and animals. Some can be tamed. However, some are wild animals. This relationship and the ability for these animals to move just like human beings is a result of great interdependence as well as great competition for resources. Human beings have rights, are protected, and have been able to respond to more claims. While animals are not beings, of a kind capable of exercising or responding to moral claims. Animal’s merit rights precisely in conjunction with human beings. because of inherent worth, humans believe that anything that has the will to live has a right to live free from pain and suffering, moral relevance, and ethically they are worthy of rights.
Looking at rights, human rights have so many reasons why they are important, two of the rights enables human to protect the environment, protects the vulnerable groups from abuse. When practicing human rights, then it shows that you are protecting morality. Thus moral human beings who tend to protect the environment have to ensure that the vulnerable human beings are protected too. But then there are instances that the rights have been threatened as a result of the actions of human beings. The threats have come from animals that we live in our environment. These are tamed and the wild. Domestic animals such as cats and dogs have chased and bitten people. Cows, horses, donkeys and goats have hit both adults and children causing serious bodily harm and even deaths. There have been human-wildlife conflicts where elephants have invaded farms and homesteads, straying lions have attacked men and women unaware and even domestic birds have caused serious bodily injuries. Why has this happened? It is because the perpetrators who are the animals have done it out of pain due to suffering. The suffering caused by men and women, boys and girls that is mankind.
When mankind causes pain to animals, it is not justified. This pain can be a result of being deprived of food, for the domestic animals. Being subjected to hard conditions like being used to power methods of propulsion like pulling or pushing carts, being tied at one place, or being slaughtered for food (In Blattner, In Coulter & In Kymlicka, 2020). Wild animals may face the cruelty of mankind through the invasion of their habitats for farming reducing the grazing or hunting lands, stoning, or poaching. All these kinds of animals are very mild. They do not attack human beings they are provoked. Some of the domestic animals due to constant torture, have some greater capacity to endure pain, on the other hand, the wild type will strike as soon as they are subjected to any form of pain like hunger due to lack of browsing or preying grounds or suspected illegal or legal poaching.
This looks like now, the harm or the danger that we face as a result of the invasion of the homes or residential environments is as a result of the pain inflicted by human beings. These creatures have a life, this tells that these creatures can feel the pain. The same pain that the animals are subjected to if human beings are subjected to the same pain, they would suffer serious bodily harm both physically as well as psychologically. Animals cannot talk or express their pain, however, they can fight or fly when it is too extreme. Some will scream when they are not able to fly or fight (Tatjana Višak, 2017). Given that they play a very important role in maintaining the ecosystem to make life manageable, then it is not right to turn a blind eye to them.
Human needs to have their humanity, protect and reduce inflicting pain unto others. Every animal has the potential to make the life of a human being affordable. Therefore it is also unethical to subject to pan and suffering, animals when they are not wild enough to threaten human life. Instead, human beings need to bring happiness, excitement and wellness livelihoods to the animals they come across.
Delilah,
This is a great start! One thing I want you to focus on is how your body paragraphs connect to your thesis statement. Your body paragraphs need to follow the road map you created with your thesis statement. Look back at the supporting reasons from your thesis (free from pain, moral relevance, ethics). The first body paragraph should only be about animals being free from pain and suffering, the second body paragraph should only be about moral relevance, and so on. You focus a lot on animal pain in every paragraph, but you need to present all of your thesis ideas. One way to do this is to make sure that each topic sentence echoes an idea from your thesis. Take a look at my post to the Week 4 discussion thread from Wednesday, February 3. This has a longer explanation of the thesis/topic sentence connection.
As for grammar, there are quite a few fragments and run-on sentences throughout your essay. The website
Scribbr
provides a good overview of sentence structure and how to fix it; see how you can use that source to improve your writing.
References
Blattner, C. E., Coulter, K., & In Kymlicka, W. (2020). Animal labour: A new frontier of interspecies justice?.
Tatjana Višak. (2017). Preventing the Suffering of Free-Living Animals: Should Animal Advocates Begin the Killing? Journal of Animal Ethics, 7(1), 78-95. doi:10.5406/janimalethics.7.1.0078